New song...not quite finished, looking for input*UPDATED VERSION*

[S-Mart Manager]

recorded a song last night. it's more wussy acoustic stuff. not sure that i'm finished yet, it's short and i think the vocals need work. i'd very much appreciate opionions if anyone would check it out. it won't take much time as it clocks in at just over a minute and a half...

edit: host board won't let me post the link because there are parenthesis in the link. so i'm putting a space in the link and you can copy and paste and take out the space in the middle of it

http://www.tindeck.com/audio /my?loc=28x3a-newem(rough).mp3

<font color="#cd6600"><font size="1">[ September 05, 2005 07:13 PM: Message edited by: District S-Mart Housewares Manager ]</font></font>

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[toymank]

I prefer the grind project with the guy from... I forget where now, but hey, sometimes wussy acoustic stuff's good [img]wink.gif[/img]

I dig the acoustic misfits stuff more, but it's alright, I think the acoustic "needling" or whatever you'd call it in the back groudn kinda complicates it a little too much, but you REALLY shouldn't take any advice from me [img]wink.gif[/img]

[S-Mart Manager]

can't always express yourself screaming along with a drum machine...and sometimes you want to do a little more than cover another band [img]wink.gif[/img]

[munkkeyboy]

Good stuff, Andy. You've got a nice steady rythym going with the guitars and good harmonizing with the vocals. I'd say maybe add another part from where it ends...the song picks up a bit right before that and the ending leaves you wanting a little more...another chorus or something...or maybe just a musical / no vocal outro [img]graemlins/thumbs_up.gif[/img]

<font color="#cd6600" size="1">[ September 06, 2005 03:26 PM: Message edited by: munk in your face ]</font>

[baimun]

I like the layers of instruments. Cool vibe.

The raw vocals are good too, but I still think you need to use some kind of mixer or something so you're micing the vocals separately from the instruments. I think what someone above was trying to say is that the vocals are getting burried in the mix.

Cool song though.

[S-Mart Manager]

thanks for the input, guys. i had thought about adding more...still trying to figure out what i want to do. i think some of the vocals might need to be re-recorded as well. i may have the vocalist in a friends band do some of the vocals, i've been talking about colaborating with him for a while.


http://www.purevolume.com/silvering

^ his band

[Peter Peeker]

needs more bass.

[S-Mart Manager]

i would honestly add bass to some of my stuff if i had one.

[S-Mart Manager]

i've actually thought a bit about picking up an acoustic bass, but i can't afford it anytime soon

[S-Mart Manager]

here's a new version. remixed a bit, re-did some vocals, and added a fingerpicking part at the end.

http://www.tindeck.com/audio/my?loc=5a3cw-The Victory at Hand.mp3

<font color="#cd6600" size="1">[ September 10, 2005 04:14 AM: Message edited by: District S-Mart Housewares Manager ]</font>